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Boarding Call WIP by ModalMechanica Boarding Call WIP by ModalMechanica
Some HW for Environment Design at CDD. NEED CRIT I need 5 of these by monday, but I want them to be awesome! THANKS

*Also, I know the perspective is way off. HALP ME.
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:iconwithinthemechanism:
I like it. It has a nice, murky atmosphere. The people on the walkway could do with a tad more detail, just to help with recognition. The mech is awesome. No real criticism there. I love the glowing pylons disappearing off into the fog. I think the text is a problem. It stands out too much. Everything else is surrounded by a mist, with soft glows and blurred details. The text looks a little slapped on. You might be able to add a little gaussian blur too it, maybe drop the opacity. I think it might look better if it appeared similar to the lights above it, graphically. I know this was done quick, and I think your technique fits the style. Good work.
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genghiscanlas Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012
sooo good
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bugfacegard Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2012
tilt the camera slightly less, enlarge the mech, put something in the immediate forground and maybe one more detail pass for good measure D.
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ModalMechanica Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012
thanks!
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:iconkeydan:
Keydan Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012
Gate M is not for pussies. They have a robot guarding it :D
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exocolumn Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2012
Great work!
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ModalMechanica Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012
thanks man
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MrJumpManV4 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Love the mech, all i could think of to add would be some sort of VTOL flying through the open space on the right and like 8ft spider said some guards on the underpass on the left.
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Gray-Mecha-Fox Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Can't critique because I am not a good artist but, sharpen the images and add some life?(color, perhaps sunset so you still get the gloomy effect I am getting or add street lights if you want to do shading.
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8FtSpider Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012  Professional Artist
Just a few things:
maybe, armed guards on walkway
make sure to light the scene with the lights shown in the scene (green or yellow lights giving green or yellow highlights)
make the "GATE M" hologram larger, maybe give it a rectangle holo-frame

Best of luck!
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ec4370 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012
I'm not good at giving critiques, but so far this looks really good. :thumbsup:
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:iconmodalmechanica:
ModalMechanica Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012
thanks man
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pentaclegram Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012
I'm no artist and can't give you much crit, but I would like to say that I really like that mech and would like to see a more fleshed-out version sometime.
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ModalMechanica Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012
thanks man
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:iconshtl:
shtl Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Sorry no time for serious crits. Just a quick drop to say it is a nice start =D
The text : you should have drawn it in speed mode too. Takes too much attention me think.

Verts tank look good :thumbsup:

Keep up !
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:iconmodalmechanica:
ModalMechanica Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012
Thanks! Yeah I actually drew this very quickly, just spent more time on the mecha
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