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Deviousness `anmari has been spreading her infectious positivity throughout our community for over 6 years. Throughout this time Ana has been at the core of all things devious, passionately developing an eclectic gallery, helping organise devmeets, participating in chat events and also recently completed dedicating her time as a Community Volunteer. We are absolutely delighted to bestow the Deviousness Award for May 2013 to `anmari, congratulations! Read More
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my bad
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The shadows in front need to be darker than the shadows beyond. You got that going on in the WAY back of this, but you don't in the front. Make them darker. It should be a gradient of shadow from the front to the back getting lighter as it goes away from you.
Also, Enlarge that Mech. The red sleeping thing on the right is bigger. Make it impressive and barely fit into that place. Do the cable lines have to be there? Is that part of the story? You are doing a Half Shadow on your mech which is something a little different, but very effective. I've never tried this myself, but it adds a lot of drama to your image. The mech is in a perfect location for that half-shadow so use it
Make the darks on your mech lighter. They're darker than the foreground shadow and that's what's throwing off the depth in your image. Right now it looks like it's fake and just copy and pasted there.
PROS:
- The pallette: I liked the colours in this one. I truly like pastel-like colours, not very bright but not too gloomy either. This one gets the balance right.
- The situation: I always like pictures showing warriors relaxing, tinkering or otherwise doing things that usually happen between the stints of fighting. It makes one imagine what their situation is, what they are dealing with and what their chances of winning/surviving are.
- The mech design: This mech is awesome. It has inspired design. It has lots of dynamism, and has the right blend of realism and fiction - I don't like too "fictional" over-the-top mech designs.
CONS (read this as "points of possible improvement"):
-The main theme (the mech) is a bit too far and looks small. I think that if the "camera" was a little closer to it, the design would appear more impressive and we would be in place to take a better look of the man on it. I understand it might be impossible to remedy now, but the fisrt feeling of looking at this pic was "I wish I could move closer".
-It feels like the picture, especially the items in the foreground on the left could make use of a bit more detail or better shape definition. Detail might not make a lot of sense when you count the amount of time it takes to create, especially when it is not on the main piece of interest on the picture but eventually creates a feeling of quality and completeness and that in turn makes it worth it.
- The light through the holes on the concrete slab above the mech is a bit too bright. Since you have a visible sky, then every light source that produces less light than that should appear darker. So the holes themselves should remain white as they are but the streaks of light falling down should be a bit darker (allow the concrete behind them to show more).
That's it from me, it's a very good piece and I wish you luck with the results of your examination!
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